Walt: Write a narrative with focus on a powerful introduction
“I’m stuck in the elevator what do I do?” cried the old lady. She was on her way to the food court when the elevator rocked she fell over and hit her head on the control panel.
Earlier that day the old lady wanted to go to the mall so she headed to the mall. When she got there she went shopping , then she got hungry so she decided to go to the food court. She saw a elevator and she waited until it opened and when it did she went in it. When she walked in it she pushed the button to go to level 4, After she pressed the button the elevator rocked and she fell over and hit her head on the control panel. When she woke up she had no idea where she was then she looked up and said
“Where am I” Then she heard a voice
“ Hello,hello are you okay hello anyone there” The old lady was so shocked because she didn't know who was talking or where it was coming from
“Hello who is that and where are you” “ I’m in the office and I am sending some men to help you get out of the elevator.
In the next 25 minutes the men came and saved her.
2 comments:
Kia ora, Alyssa
I really like how you stated your narrative it was really interesting. Do you know how you can improve in you writing?
Hello Alyssa.
When I was reading your introduction I thought it was really interesting. Your problem was interesting to I Liked reading your story. I think you done a better story than mine because yours is more interesting. Do you know anyone that has been stuck in the elevator for real life?
Keep up the good work =)
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